some people believe that a greater difference in age between parents and children is more beneficial than less of a difference. Do you think the advantages of a greater age difference outweigh the disadvantages?

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relationship
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the relationship
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between children and
parents
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in viewpoint which
mostly
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due to their
age
. In
this
regard, some people think
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families
familes
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families
in which there is a significant gap between
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age
and kids can be more appropriate. By
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contrast, another group say, the less difference, the more
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beneficial
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beneficial
. In my opinion,
although
it depends on many items, a short distance in
age
between family
member
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is better.
Firstly
, the
first
group believed in
parents
who are far older than their
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child
child's
childs
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can be more successful in their
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connections
conections
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connections
,
therefore
,
this
feature can be considered
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advantage
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for families.
Accordingly
,
father
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and mother who are experienced surely can bring up their child in
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calmer condition.
For example
, during teenage, older
parents
are more relaxed when they face
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the
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teenagers
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problems.
Secondly
, it should be mentioned that people generally are interested in forming friendships or relationships with people who have the same
age
.
Subsequently
, family members whose
age
difference is less might be closer in their ideas or landscapes, particularly when children are youth.
For instance
, a father
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age
at around forty probably can understand the difficulties of his son
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sexual matters.
That is
usually because he can
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distinctly
distincly
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remember his own issues yet.
However
, understanding each other is not related to
the
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age
and it depends on a lot of various elements
such
as culture,
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character
charecter
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character
, mental health and so on. In conclusion, family relationships and problems are mostly complicated and
needs
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a comprehensive study.
As a result
, depending on the family condition and the members' traits,
this
issue might have completely distinct
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outcomes
outcome
outcoms
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outcomes
.
Nonetheless
, I think based on the objective
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fewer margin in family
members
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age
is much
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.
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