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Money is spent on space exploration. It would be better if they spent it improving the life of humans on Earth. TO what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction
Nowadays,
governments
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 and private entrepreneurs allocate enormous amounts of money to
space
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 exploration. Some
people
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 argue that these financial resources should
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 be spent on improving
people
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's lives on Earth. I disagree with
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 view because
space
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 research
also
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 brings considerable benefits to humanity.
Body paragraph 1
On the one hand,
governments
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 should allocate more funding to addressing problems on Earth. One of the most compelling reasons is that millions of
people
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 still suffer from hunger and serious illnesses. If more money were invested in hospitals, schools and public services,
people
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's living standards could improve significantly.
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,
governments
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 could provide better medical facilities and ensure access to quality education for children.
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, more individuals would have the opportunity to contribute to society and secure a better future.
Body paragraph 2
On the other hand
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, spending money on
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 exploration should not be considered a waste of financial resources.
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 is because
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 research can lead to significant technological advancements that benefit humanity.
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, satellite technology plays an essential role in mobile communication, weather forecasting and navigation systems. These innovations make
people
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's daily lives more convenient and enable
governments
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 to predict natural disasters,
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 as floods, tornadoes and tsunamis.
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, authorities can take preventive measures and potentially save thousands of lives.
Conclusion
In conclusion,
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 I believe that improving living standards deserves considerable financial attention, I do not think that
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 exploration should be abandoned.
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,
governments
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 should maintain a balance between addressing problems on Earth and investing in
space
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 research.

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task response
Your view is clear: you do not agree that all space money should go to life on Earth. To make it even stronger, say more clearly that money for Earth and money for space can work together, not only be split between two choices.
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Your main ideas are good, but add one more clear link between space work and help on Earth. For example, explain how weather reports can help farmers, or how space research can lead to new health tools.
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Your examples fit the topic. Try to give one more real or more detailed example, such as satellites helping people find safe routes during floods.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear four-part shape: opening, two main parts, and ending. Each main part has one main idea, which makes it easy to follow.
coherence and cohesion
The links between ideas are good, such as “For instance” and “As a result”. You can use fewer set linking words in some places and make the cause and result link more direct.
coherence and cohesion
The last part matches the opening well. You could make the final view more direct by saying that space work should continue while urgent needs on Earth get enough money.
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You answer the full question and keep the same view from the opening to the end.
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The points about hunger, health, schools, satellites, weather, and disaster warnings are closely linked to the topic.
coherence and cohesion
Your paragraphs are in a clear order, and the reader can understand your argument without effort.
coherence and cohesion
The topic sentences clearly show what each main part will discuss.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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