In some countries, citizens must pay a lot of money in taxes, but education and healthcare are free. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

In a number of countries, residents must pay high taxes,
however
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the
government
has paid for
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their education
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the education
and treatment. In my
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the benefits are more because
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and medical care are essential for
people
, no matter how much we pay, if we have these benefits without paying for them.
This
essay will highlight why
this
is a viable approach.
To begin
with, there is a school of thought that
people
should not be taxed for
education
and
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medical benefits
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medical benefits
.
This
is because, in many countries,
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government
-run hospitals and
education
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institutions lack the basic infrastructure and the technology required to provide the necessary services.
For example
, in a developing country like India, primary schools and state-run medical centres are not world-class, and
therefore
,
people
prefer themselves being treated at private hospitals and enrol their children in international schools.
Hence
, not being equipped with
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facilities, constitute a major obstacle to
such
a tax-benefit system.
To begin
with, free
education
can be beneficial for those who do not have the ability to pay or are not able to work.
For example
, my cousin did not pay for his degree because in Norway it is free for residents.
As a
result
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he became a well-educated specialist and now he works and pays taxes and
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his country. Whereas, less-educated
people
who find it difficult and hopeless or less motivated in their life, so tend to commit a crime and drug abuse and become homeless.
As a
result
, it is a beneficial investment for the
government
to provide
education
free.
First
of all, free
education
can be advantageous for
people
who do not have the ability to pay the bill of school or hospital or are not able to work for earning money. How the
government
could provide health and
education
services to the
people
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if they do not pay adequate taxes
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This
is a wise thought that will help the physical and mental health of all citizens. With
this
performance,
people
will be more prosperous and healthier.
For example
, the cost of treatment for chronic diseases
such
as heart disease is very high, and if these costs are not provided by the
government
and the individual can not afford it, it can lead to death.
Secondly
,
people
who have continued their
education
can reduce their crime rates, as well as find a more satisfying job.
However
, illiterate
people
often have problems and frustration in their lives or are less motivated, and
as a
result
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tend to commit
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and drug abuse, and eventually become homeless.
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result
, it is
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performance for the
government
to provide
education
free. To conclude, I strongly believe that the benefits of a tax system that provides free
education
and healthcare for all, far outweigh the drawbacks and I visibly believe that the
government
should cover those costs for the well-being of residents.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Equitable access
  • Public health
  • Literacy rates
  • Social inequalities
  • Government accountability
  • Standard of living
  • Financial burden
  • Taxpayers
  • Government inefficiency
  • Quality of services
  • Competition
  • Personal responsibility
  • Self-reliance
  • Overreliance
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