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The most important function of music is that it helps people reduce stress. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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The
music
 function has proven that it has a magic feature to reduce the mental
stress
 of human beings.
However
,
people
 might have different opinions on
this
 topic which will be discussed in
this
 essay, meanwhile, I totally agree with the healing power of
music
.
Firstly
, when you are returning from your workplace over-whelmed with your job you may feel that to get some relaxation while driving back home.
For instance
, listening to
music
 will help to reduce your mental
stress
.
Moreover
, your focus will certainly change and feel freedom
such
 as positive vibes, and active electrodes released by the brain.
Secondly
, unnecessary thoughts and distractions which lead to mental depression can
also
 be overcome with
music
.
For example
, a bedridden patient can listen to a song, and get cured slowly,
such
 incidents happened in India a few years ago.
Furthermore
, not only human beings but
also
 animals had
also
 responded to the
music
 and were obedient to their master. Normally,
people
 with a panic mentality should hear the light sound of any musical instrument can get relief from their physical and mental
stress
.
Similarly
, when you are at the gym doing a workout,
music
 motivates you to do more time and keeps us energetic.
In contrast
 to the above, some members have no interest in the
music
,
that is
 to say, they do not want to waste their time listening to the voice of the instrument, whereas, they think that they can be more productive in their life using the time for variable, and valuable purposes.
Finally
, as I mentioned in my introduction, listening to
music
 helps
people
 to reduce their
stress
,
people
 certainly have different opinions on it ,but I will stick on to the positive approach to
music
.
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