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The most important function of music is that it helps people reduce stress. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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 function has proven that it has a magic feature to reduce the mental
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 of human beings.
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,
people
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 might have different opinions on
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 topic which will be discussed in
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 essay, meanwhile, I totally agree with the healing power of
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, when you are returning from your workplace over-whelmed with your job you may feel that to get some relaxation while driving back home.
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, listening to
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 will help to reduce your mental
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, your focus will certainly change and feel freedom
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 as positive vibes, and active electrodes released by the brain.
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, unnecessary thoughts and distractions which lead to mental depression can
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 be overcome with
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, a bedridden patient can listen to a song, and get cured slowly,
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 incidents happened in India a few years ago.
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, not only human beings but
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 animals had
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 responded to the
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 and were obedient to their master. Normally,
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 with a panic mentality should hear the light sound of any musical instrument can get relief from their physical and mental
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, when you are at the gym doing a workout,
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 motivates you to do more time and keeps us energetic.
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 to the above, some members have no interest in the
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 to say, they do not want to waste their time listening to the voice of the instrument, whereas, they think that they can be more productive in their life using the time for variable, and valuable purposes.
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, as I mentioned in my introduction, listening to
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 helps
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 to reduce their
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,
people
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 certainly have different opinions on it ,but I will stick on to the positive approach to
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