It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?
Taking
risks
could be important for Use synonyms
people
, but not on both sides of their Use synonyms
lives
It is not good for Use synonyms
people
to take Use synonyms
risks
in their professional and personal Use synonyms
lives
. They might be endangering both sides of their Use synonyms
life
by taking some Use synonyms
risks
and losing their job or even their peaceful personal Use synonyms
life
.
Taking Use synonyms
risks
can be beneficial for Use synonyms
people
in their professional Use synonyms
lives
. Doing some big work that Use synonyms
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possible in some areas, could have some good results after doing them. Change the verb form
is
For example
, an employee accepts responsibility for doing a big project which is out of her or his responsibility in the company where she or he works, and after being successful in Linking Words
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project can get a promotion or a salary Linking Words
increasement
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increase
however
, Linking Words
people
may have a huge problem which is endangering whole company, getting fired or paying a large fine if they cannot doing the best in some related situations.
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On the other hand
, taking Linking Words
risks
in personal Use synonyms
life
is a big decision and Use synonyms
people
should think more about that. Personal Use synonyms
life
includes all members of a family, and if not going to be successful and do not have good results can have bad impacts on all members of a family. Use synonyms
For example
, buying a house which is not expensive is a good idea but if Linking Words
this
house has some document problems can involve everyone in a family and take them peacefully.
In conclusion, Taking Linking Words
risks
not only is dangerous but Use synonyms
also
could damage the other parts of Linking Words
life
and the position that Use synonyms
people
have in their personal Use synonyms
life
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in career Linking Words
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