You are planning to return to your home town for a holiday after a long absence. Write a letter to one of your old friend. In your letter, . explain that you are coming and that you'd like to meet again . describe what you're planning to do . say where you're staying and when you'd free to meet.

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Dear John, How are you? I hope you are fine. I am writing

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letter to inform you that I will fly back to Malaysia next month before the Chinese New Year. I am so excited that I can

finally

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go home to meet everyone especially you and my family. I will stay in town for two months.

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, I would like to go visit around the cities and the night market.

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, I miss the street food so much when I live in Australia

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as curry chicken, famous assam laksa and roti canai , so I will go to taste the food in the KLIA foodcourt shopping centre.

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, I would attend my best friend's wedding as she

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my best friend and colleague

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we were studying in high school. I will stay in my parent's house

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I'm in Malaysia. I really miss you and have never seen you since I left my hometown. Can we meet up on the 1st of December on Friday morning in my parent's new

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coffee shop? I can't wait to catch up with you together! Your loves, Fong

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coherence and cohesion

Consider organizing your ideas more clearly by ensuring that each paragraph focuses on a single aspect of your trip and plans. This will enhance the flow of your letter and make it easier for the reader to follow.

task achievement

Make sure to check for small grammatical errors for an even clearer message, such as tense consistency and proper punctuation. For example, 'the cities' might be clearer as 'the city'.

task achievement

You conveyed enthusiasm and warmth throughout your letter, effectively expressing your excitement about returning home and meeting your friend.

coherence and cohesion

Your greeting and closing were friendly and appropriate, which added a personal touch to the letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

190 words

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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