In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree with this option?
Nowadays there is a rise in
number
of Change the article
a number
the number
people
who would prefer fast food
, rather than a healthy meal and due to that people
have to face with
different diseases. It is really important to take under control that field and the most effective plan to reach Change preposition
apply
that is
to
high prices on fast Replace the word
too
food
. I agree with that statement and, in my opinion, if the government accept that rule, it will save Correct your spelling
lives
life
life's
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the lifes
lifes
of many Correct your spelling
lives
people
and may reduce diseases
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I will set out to explain why.
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First
of all, fast food
is very cheap and it can afford almost
everyone in the world. Change preposition
by almost
People
do not have to worry about buying food
in supermarkets, where they can spend much more money. Also
it is easier to have a quick mealAdd a comma
,Also
,
because you do not have to cook something by yourself. Remove the comma
apply
However
, people
do not think how
dangerous fast Change preposition
about how
food
can be. For example
, some years ago a group of scientists from the UK did an experiment, where a healthy man had eaten only in
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at
McDonalds
three times a day Change noun form
Mcdonald's
Mcdonalds'
during
1 month. Change preposition
for
In
the end of Change the preposition
At
that
his weight rose from 70 kilos to 100 kilos! By the way, doctors examined his sugar level which had increased Add a comma
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in
two times and he was Change preposition
apply
at
the Change preposition
in
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first
firt
stage of diabetes!
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first
Besides
, sometimes people
do not have a choice to eat Correct your spelling
healthy
helthy
. Correct your spelling
healthy
For example
, there are Correct your spelling
schools
scools
in the US, where children have only fast Correct your spelling
schools
food
during
the whole day. That leads to Change preposition
for
increase
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an increase
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in a
a
number of students with overweight, Change the article
the
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have heart-diseases
heart-diseases
and diabetes. Usually, their meal is free and it is included in the school payment, but if a student wants to have a healthy lunch, he or she needs to pay extra, while it has to be vice versa.
To conclude, the issues connected with unhealthy Correct your spelling
heart diseases
food
are still take
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still take
the
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apply
first
place in a significant number of countries. The responsibility of it lays down on the government due to they usually do not really care about people
’s health. Personally, I hope that extra taxes on fast food
will decrease it’s
demand and popularity and Replace the word
its
people
could think about their health more.Submitted by nejo.quol on
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