In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree with this option?

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Nowadays there is a rise in
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who would prefer fast
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, rather than a healthy meal and due to that
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different diseases. It is really important to take under control that field and the most effective plan to reach
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high prices on fast
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. I agree with that statement and, in my opinion, if the government accept that rule, it will save
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and may reduce
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development. In
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I will set out to explain why.
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of all, fast
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is very cheap and it can afford
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everyone in the world.
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do not have to worry about buying
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in supermarkets, where they can spend much more money.
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it is easier to have a quick meal
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because you do not have to cook something by yourself.
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,
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do not think
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dangerous fast
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can be.
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, some years ago a group of scientists from the UK did an experiment, where a healthy man had eaten only
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McDonalds
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three times a day
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1 month.
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his weight rose from 70 kilos to 100 kilos! By the way, doctors examined his sugar level which had increased
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stage of diabetes!
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, sometimes
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do not have a choice to eat
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healthy
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healthy
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, there are
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schools
in the US, where children have only fast
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the whole day. That leads to
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number of students with overweight,
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have heart-diseases
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heart diseases
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and diabetes. Usually, their meal is free and it is included in the school payment, but if a student wants to have a healthy lunch, he or she needs to pay extra, while it has to be vice versa. To conclude, the issues connected with unhealthy
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are still take
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first
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place in a significant number of countries. The responsibility of it lays down on the government due to they usually do not really care about
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’s health. Personally, I hope that extra taxes on fast
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will decrease
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demand and popularity and
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could think about their health more.
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