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Some people think that online reading materials are better for children. Others argue that traditional paper-based resources are better. Discuss and give your opinion.

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Online reading
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 and Offline reading
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 are two different things each of them has a different benefit. In Online material, people read
books
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, and news on the way to their office or their specific work or even while travelling. Offline
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 like
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-based recourses
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 as
books
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 and newspapers are very hard to handle along with their other things.  In online material, people not only get used to the internet but
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 get useful to browse anything. In earlier times there was not an upgrade version of technologies which were not made. Now in the 21st century, many technologies have been made so that it can be easy for them to go. During Covid,
children
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 were studying online and many other apps were made so that they do not lack in studies. It is useful as well as harmful for
children
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 to
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 online reading material as it affects their health and their eyesight. It gives them to strain their eyes to look at the screen. The
paper
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-based resources are better because they will help them to read and mark in the textbook at the time and while using online material it will be difficult for them to mark and make notes on it. The
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-based material
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 produces harmful inks which will affect
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 and will give them skin infections.
Paper
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 material can be useful but at the same time can be harmful to
children
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. The positive insight of the online material is that they can
use
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 download it as anytime and can
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 it later for their reference. It can
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 be useful to learn about new technologies and will release the work of the parents and teacher and can refer to various
books
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 which are available online. The negative impact of the
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 material leads to skin problems as they have many intoxicants while printing
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. Major problems occur like cutting
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 tree trunks for producing
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 which lessens the trees in our surroundings and which not only produces pollution but
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 troubles of not getting fresh air. My opinion of
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 topic may differ due to circumstances, I believe that online
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 can be more useful for
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 for their studies and people who cannot afford
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 should be given any source of technology so that it will be easier to gain information through different sites and platforms. I would recommend and give a conclusion on it like they should
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 online reading
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 rather using
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 material for their studies so that it will be informative for
children
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 who are keen to learn new words and phrases and know what is happening in the world get a collective knowledge on
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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