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Some people think that cars are the best way to travel in a city, while others think that bicycle is better. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

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One of the most common vehicles to use is a car as it is the fastest accommodation in
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 present day. Despite all, the oldest assume that riding a bicycle is more functional to the eco-system. In
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 essay, I will describe
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 explain on both sides.
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 with, cars are the modern conception of the humankind in twentieth century. Automatic robots have been designed metals to make the easiest transportation to move to each place in just a few minutes.
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, people with packed schedules could drive by themselves without worrying about queues
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 the rush hour in public transportation. Unfortunately, cars require oil to start the engine and it often causes several troubles in the atmosphere. Bike is
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 well-known in oldster. One of the reasons it still exists is because it has been found for ages.
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, it has non-chemical residue from CO2 production. As can be seen, the bicycle is quarters made of wood and metals and it costs less than car production which makes the cost of maintenance for bikes considerably lower than that of cars. An example of a good bike has zero carbon emissions, making it environmentally friendly.
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, riders need to exert extra effort
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 cycling as bikes tend to have a slower pace.
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, both have benefits and demerits for personal usage in society. In my opinion, biking is a better option than driving in the city because it not only reduces pollution but is
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 socially and economically budgetary.

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introduction conclusion present
Ensure the introduction clearly presents the topic and outlines the structure of your argument. Introduce both sides of the argument before stating your opinion.
supported main points
Support main points with specific and relevant examples. Instead of mentioning 'good bikes' in general terms, provide concrete illustrations of how bicycles have a positive impact on the environment or offer particular instances where bicycles have proven beneficial in urban settings.
clear comprehensive ideas
Develop clear and comprehensive ideas throughout your essay. Some points are mentioned only in passing, such as the negative impact of cars on the environment and the economic benefits of bicycles. Expand on these points to strengthen your argument.
complete response
Make sure your essay fully responds to all parts of the task. While the essay discusses both sides of the argument, it could be improved by a more detailed explanation of why some may prefer cars in the city, to balance the argument before concluding with your own opinion.
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