Governments should spend money to encourage the development of sport and art for school students rather than supporting professional sports and art performances for the public. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays we have many opportunities to do different types of activities but many young

people

are choosing to do shopping whenever they have free time and money. There are several reasons why it happened. The

first

, and I think the main reason, is overvalued needs. We live in the era of consumption and our brain has started to think in

this

way. When we see something interesting on social media we usually want to buy it. When we see some pretty clothes that our

friends’

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have, we

also

want to buy them. And because of that

tendency

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there are literally minutes of thinking and buying. In the modern world, shopping is not only for rich

people

, we all have

this

opportunity, even if

you

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live in the middle of nowhere. When you want something, all that you need is to pick up your phone and order

this

item. Young

people

are really susceptible to different modern trends, so they

don;t

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even think about their

purchase. If they want it - they buy it. The problem is that young

people

don’t think that

this

is not a normal situation

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because everyone is doing

this

. So usually their

buyings

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are not deliberate. The

second

reason is the availability of shopping.

People

the

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big cities can spend whole days in big malls, but if there is no shopping

center

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in your town, you always can do an online purchase and be on the same wave

with

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others. In my opinion, it is really a problem and every parent has to be concerned about the interest

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shopping. If a child doesn’t have any hobby and always asks to give him some money it is

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first

symptom of shopaholism. If young

people

spent all of their

salary

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shopping - it is the same. We all need to be responsible for our lives and always be concerned about our shopping

behavior

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. Shopping is not a good activity in your free time.

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