TOPIC: In recent years, the family structure and the role of its members are gradually changing. What kinds of changes can occur? Do you think these changes are positive and negative?

Nowadays family plays an important role in one life's, It was men who are working and
women
sit at home and do outdoor chores like washing, cleaning, cooking and many more. In our society, they say only men can earn and
women
will sit at home doing their chores but in the 21st century everything has changed and now there are
women
who are working as well.
This
gives a good impact on
women
to do their jobs irrespective of an orthodox family.  There can be many pros and cons to
this
situation, like some people may demotivate them or some may motivate them to go ahead in life. It not only
changes
their mentality but
also
changes
the structure of their house and the roles of each family member. The pros are that if there can be two earning members in the family who support each other and manage each and everything it is good for family members to support them gradually. The main motive of everyone is to earn money and fulfil all their requirement and save it for the future so each and
everyone
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in the family not only supports them but
also
helps them with their household chores. The cons for
this
situation
is
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that some family who is
an
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orthodox
families
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does not support or want someone from their families should work rather a man who knows how to work and bring money.
This
is not about
women
it is about the
changes
and mentality
which
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people go through and they
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a negative impact on others as well.  The
changes
can occur like communication barriers between them and
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children
childrens
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, cannot pay proper attention
on
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their work, cannot go to their school meetings,
distrub
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minds due to stress and so on. But the good can
also
happen with them which is like they can fulfil all their
parents
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and
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children
childrens
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need they can in future live a lavish life not only that but
also
they may go out for tours and everything.
For example
: one of my
neighbour
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lives with her family she
have
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two children and they both go to school, and she is a working
women
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. Every night they argue
on
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their
communications
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barriers and they try to make them understand that she gets tired of her working schedule. Perhaps she
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to control all the problems and try
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them as soon as it gets done. I would strongly
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recommend
reccomend
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recommend
that everyone who is working should give time to their
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and as well as to their children so that they do not feel any communication gaps between them and will not only they will be happy but
also
will help them to earn for themselves.
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