Internet social media have become very popular. To what extent do you think this is a good or bad thing? Why do you think this is the case?

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In our digital era, the

Internet

and online platforms are common

among

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society. Many

people

argue

that

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whether is an advantageous development or not and

curious

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about the reason why

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this

phenomenon. I believe

this

trend has a good outcome

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because thanks to improved technology we can manage mandatory tasks without living

home

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such

as money transfers and meetings via video calls.

To begin

with, there is no doubt that our circumstances are better in our contemporary era compared

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the past. Many years ago,

people

had to wait

long

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lines at banks

so as

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to send money to their

family

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and pay bills. On the

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contrary

contraty

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contrary

,nowadays

people

can send money in five minutes via smartphones with the help of the

Internet

and pay bills easily without standing up as well.

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developed

developted

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developed

social media made our relationships updated by sharing posts.

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, it is

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understandable

understantable

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understandable

why

people

enjoy surfing online.

Furthermore

, a great number of

people

appreciate keeping

touch

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with

people

via video calls by using the

Internet

connection.

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, during the

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Covid-19 pandemic, many corporate transformed office shift into

home

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office in order to keep working by taking health measures. And, almost all

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governments mandated workers

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stay in quarantines by using legal

forces

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However

, when all those measurements lost validity, a significant number of corporate kept continue to

working

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from

home

offices. Because, during the pandemic, they discovered annual income increased massively by working from

home

. To conclude, even if

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outcome of digital improvements like the

Internet

and social media, I firmly believe it is advantageous for society.

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Internet social media have become very popular. To what extent do you think this is a good or bad thing? Why do you think this is the case?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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