You recently had your computer fixed at a local computer store, however, you are not pleased with the service you received. Write a letter to the store manager. In the letter: describe the situation explain why you are dissatisfied say what you want the manager to do Write at least 150 words.
Dear Sir or Madam,
I took my PC to your store 4
days
ago on Tuesday and had it fixed for a charge of $20. However
, I am writing to express my strong dissatisfaction with the service I received from a particular technician.
First of all, I have been having some computer problems like slow startup and internet connection interruptions for the last
few days
. When I took my personal computer to your store the technician, who named himself Russel, promised to fix it in a couple of days
. Furthermore
, he added there is no need to worry about all the data in it. After 2 days
, Russel called to warn me about the delay with repair work and I waited for a week to get my computer back.
To my shock, when I finally
got my laptop I realized that it had no changes in its working. Moreover
, all my personal data and files from my workplace were gone. I was terribly disappointed because I had wasted money, and time and this
case put me in a difficult situation with my job duties.
My intention in writing this
letter is to demand that you restore my removed data and fix it properly at no extra charge as I have already paid for it.
I look forward to your reply and a resolution to my problem.
Yours faithfully,
Ron Taylor.Submitted by saint_4ever on
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task achievement
You did well in detailing the situation, explaining your dissatisfaction, and stating what you want the manager to do. This shows a clear understanding of the task requirements.
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For further improvement, consider elaborating more on the consequences of the unsatisfactory service, such as the specific impact on your job duties. This could enhance the completeness of your response.
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Your letter has a logical flow, which is commendable. Each paragraph focuses on a single idea, contributing to the coherence and cohesion of your writing.
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To elevate your letter, try using a wider range of linking words and cohesive devices. This will improve the connectivity between ideas and paragraphs.