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Some people think that enjoying the present is more important than planning for the future for both countries and individuals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, many
people
 think that we should enjoy the moment rather than calculate everything for the
future
.
This
 phenomenon has aroused wide concern among various circles. Divergent as
people
's views on
this
 issue in question may be, I disagree with the idea is that doing anything without any consideration for the
future
 or other
people
. Of all the reasons why we should have our own
future
 plans, probably the most significant one is that planning is one of the essential elements in making your dream come true.
For instance
, make assumptions as much as you can about any issue you may get into and the way out, and every move is pointed to one goal. It is useful in preventing
people
 make the wrong decision when facing a problem because you already predict the problem and the solution. It is no doubt that planning can help
people
 to achieve their targets. Another reason that should not be overlooked is that acting without consideration for the
future
 may hurt yourself or others.
For example
, many teenagers often buy things that they cannot afford, and they even borrow money to buy them. Their loan falls on their family eventually since they do not have the ability to repay the money. To pay back the loan, their parents have been forced to give up the retirement funds that they save for many years.
As a result
, reckless actions not only influence themself, but they
also
 hurt the
people
 who care about them. Under
this
 line of thinking,
people
 who live without a plan for the
future
 are more likely a disaster to everyone. For the above reasons, I completely disagree with the
people
 who live in present.
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