Young people are leaving their home from rural areas to study at work in cities. Do the advantages of this development outweigh its disadvantages?
These days, more and more
people
are develop
their Wrong verb form
developing
lifestyle
. The youth generation, who are leaving their families and homes for Fix the agreement mistake
lifestyles
further
study and better job opportunities, go from regional parts to mega
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megacities
cities
. Personally, I completely agree with this
view and suppose that this
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initiative
intiative
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initiative
of
young Change preposition
for
people
can bring about more benefits for lead
standard Wrong verb form
leading
life
compared to any drawbacks it might bring.
On the one hand, home leaving can be effective of
young Change preposition
for
people
for
study on Change preposition
to
job
purpose. Correct article usage
the job
First
of all, they are
broadened their communication skill. When they go to towns, they will be Unnecessary verb
apply
opportunity
to meet new Add an article
an opportunity
the opportunity
people
, know
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and know
food
and culture. Change preposition
about food
For instance
, when people
move on
one region to another region, they recognise new Change preposition
from
people
this
area and Change preposition
in this
also
know that
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the
sites
culture, food and tradition. For Change noun form
site's
this
reason, they will increase communication
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their communication
skill
and knowledge. Fix the agreement mistake
skills
Secondly
, it has been realized that megacities gives
better quality Change the verb form
give
life
. If Change preposition
of life
people
come in
Change preposition
to
cities
, they will take higher study, job opportunity
, social safety, health Fix the agreement mistake
opportunities
factities
and so on. Correct your spelling
facilities
That is
why leaving home is beneficial of
Change preposition
for
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youngsters
young stars
youngstars
.
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young stars
However
, I would argue that these benefits are outweighed by
the disadvantages. Change preposition
apply
Leave
home can be the main cause Wrong verb form
Leaving
homesickness
because young Change preposition
of homesickness
people
cannot easily adopt
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adapt
new
Change preposition
to new
cities
environment. It's hard to adjust new
Friends, food and cultural differences. Another way is that it is difficult to start Change preposition
to new
new
Add an article
a new
life
. In other word
, when you go from the countryside to big Change the wording
another word
other words
cities
, you will face different types of problems such
as commuting to new people
, finding accommodations and so on. This
is so much
challenging for a new person at that place.
To conclude, I strongly believe that broadening social bonds on spending standard lifestyle Correct quantifier usage
apply
outweigh
any of the minor drawbacks that could result from causing homesickness and challenging Correct subject-verb agreement
outweighs
life
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