Young people are leaving their home from rural areas to study at work in cities. Do the advantages of this development outweigh its disadvantages?

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These days, more and more
people
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develop
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their
lifestyle
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. The youth generation, who are leaving their families and homes for
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study and better job opportunities, go from regional parts to
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megacities
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cities
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. Personally, I completely agree with
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initiative
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young
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can bring about more benefits for
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standard
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compared to any drawbacks it might bring. On the one hand, home leaving can be effective
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young
people
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for
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study on
job
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purpose.
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of all, they
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broadened their communication skill. When they go to towns, they will be
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an opportunity
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to meet new
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,
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and know
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food
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about food
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and culture.
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, when
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move
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from
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one region to another region, they recognise new
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this
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in this
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area and
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know
that
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sites
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culture, food and tradition. For
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reason, they will increase
communication
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their communication
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skill
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skills
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and knowledge.
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, it has been realized that megacities
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better quality
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life
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of life
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. If
people
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come
in
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to
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cities
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, they will take higher study, job
opportunity
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opportunities
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, social safety, health
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facilities
and so on.
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why leaving home is beneficial
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youngsters
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young stars
.
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, I would argue that these benefits are outweighed
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the disadvantages.
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Leaving
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home can be the main cause
homesickness
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of homesickness
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because young
people
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cannot easily
adopt
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adapt
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new
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to new
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cities
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environment. It's hard to adjust
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Friends, food and cultural differences. Another way is that it is difficult to start
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life
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. In
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, when you go from the countryside to big
cities
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, you will face different types of problems
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as commuting to new
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, finding accommodations and so on.
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is so
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challenging for a new person at that place. To conclude, I strongly believe that broadening social bonds on spending standard lifestyle
outweigh
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outweighs
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any of the minor drawbacks that could result from causing homesickness and challenging
life
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.
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