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In many countries nowadays, consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over the world.

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These days, in a lot
regions
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, customers can buy food from different countries when they go to a
supermarket
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. I
beleive
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believe
 that
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 trend is a positive development, and
people
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 have huge benefits with
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. Consumers can buy their traditional
foods
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 from
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supermarket
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a supermarket
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Although
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. Although
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 they live in
a
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apply
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another country
,
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apply
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.
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,
people
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 can buy different countries’
foods
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 without going to another country.
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, students
,
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 who are
studing
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studying
 in another country
,
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 can buy traditional
foods
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, which are important for their healthy lives.
Consequesntly
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Consequently
, they can focus on their
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work
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 so that they can achieve high marks on their exams.
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, my university friend, who lives in
the
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apply
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Australia, buys Sri
Lankans
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foods
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 from the
supermarket
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, and he
beleive
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believes
 that it is
such
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 a huge benefit for him
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such
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, such
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 as remembering the flavour of traditional
foods
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. If
people
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 want to stay healthy, consuming their traditional
foods
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 will be helpful.
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,
In
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in
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people
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want
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wanted
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 to buy
another countries’
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food from other countries
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foods
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, they
have
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had
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 to go overseas, so it would
be not
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not be
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 a
cost effective
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cost-effective
 thing. Nowadays,
people
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 have a big opportunity to buy imported
foods
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 from the
supermarket
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For
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 example, technology has been growing rapidly, so a lot of
people
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start Youtube
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have started YouTube
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 channels significantly.
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,
youtubers
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YouTubers
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 want some special
ingrediants
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ingredients
 to cook the different
foods
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,
while
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 they are cooking
and
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apply
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,
they
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and they
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 can buy those from the supermarkets.
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, their social media income can be increased. In conclusion, I
belive
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believe
 that
people
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 have a lot of opportunities with
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 so that they can consume a wide range of
foods
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.
Although
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people
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 live in
another
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other
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 countries ,they have the availability of
foods
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.

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task response
For task response: Your main answer is clear. You say this is a good change. But some ideas are not fully explained. Try to show more clearly why each point helps people.
task response
For task response: Use examples that fit the point better. The student example is okay, but the YouTube example feels less direct. A more simple example about families or workers would be stronger.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: Your essay has a clear start, two body parts, and an end. This is good. But some sentences are hard to follow because word order and grammar are not clear.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: Use linking words in a simple and correct way. Words like first, second, for example, and in conclusion are good, but some are used in a long or unclear sentence.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: Make one main idea in each paragraph and explain it step by step. This will help the reader follow your meaning more easily.
task response
For task response: You answer the question and give a clear opinion from the start.
task response
For task response: You give two main benefits: people can buy food from home, and people can try food from other places.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: Your essay has a basic paragraph plan with introduction, body, and conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: You use some linking words such as firstly, secondly, for instance, and in conclusion.
Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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