Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children’s who are taught to co operate rather than compete become more useful adults.

Some people believe that

children

should face

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competitions

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competition

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while

others

argue that cooperation is a better way for

children

to become successful and beneficial adults.

However

, I believe that

children

concerned with competition can be more successful in future.  In

this

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I am going to discuss both views and draw my own conclusion.

First

of all, competition is a must in today’s society. Without

rivalry

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people cannot improve yourselves and become better than before. Competition motivates them in life, in the working environment and

also

in education.

Children

need to be taught to compete with

others

to become

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better

student

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in terms of grades and virtue because when they grow up and start to work, competing is crucial in leading a good life and

to be

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successful.

For example

, if a person wants to create

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company, that company must be able to compete with

others

to survive and continue to grow.

However

, cooperation is

also

a beneficial attribute, which should be taught to

children

.

This

is because it makes the person more inclusive and open to

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a helping hand to

others

. It helps an individual rise above all barriers and

unite

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with

others

to promote mutual well-being.

For example

, a child who is

co-operative

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will help his friends with homework and exam preparations, rather than being selfish to achieve the highest grade himself or herself and denying to help

others

.

Moreover

, being

co-operative

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helps one to become a better individual, by sharing everyone’s joys and sorrows and helping people to rise up when they face obstacles. To sum up, even though it is highly recommended that

children

should be taught to be competitive and always be pushing for their goals, teamwork and co-operation should not be ignored and are

also

a high demand needed for future success.