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The best way to solve the world’s environment problem is to increase the price of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is a controversial perspective over whether it is optimal to boost
fuel
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 prices to solve the global environmental problem. I practically disagree with
this
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 statement. Without a shadow of a doubt, increasing the
cost
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of
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if
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of
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fuel
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 is not the optimal method to solve the environment. There are inelastic
demands
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 for oil on the grounds that it is an indispensable material that all vehicles run on.
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, people still have ever-increasing
demands
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 despite the increase in
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fuel's
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price
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prices
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.
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although
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 the Vietnamese authority has increased the
cost
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 of
fuel
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 recently,
fuel
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 is continued being bought
everyday
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. As the
demands
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 for work and studying
is
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 of necessity, increasing the
cost
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 of
fuel
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 will make no difference in lessening the number of
transportations
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 uses.
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, boosting the
cost
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 of oil is not an effective method to protect the environment. While
an
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 ineffective impact of the increase in
the
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fuel's
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 price is widely acknowledged, there is a wealth of more far-reaching alternatives to address environmental issues. Unlike other conventional automobiles, electric vehicles which run on renewable energy do not emit greenhouse gas emissions,
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 it does not negatively affect the air quality.
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, Vinfast is a notorious car
make
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 in Vietnam which has environmentally friendly bus systems
run
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that run
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 on electricity. It can both meet the
demands
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 for
movement
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the movement
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 of citizens and
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 bring positive impacts on the quality of air.
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, utilizing hybrid vehicles is one of the effective methods in order to reduce exhausted fumes, which can protect the surrounding. In my conclusion, increasing the
cost
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 of oil is not the optimal way to solve international
environment
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environmental
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issue
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issues
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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