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It is often claimed that electronic devices will soon replace paper books. Do you agree or disagree?

#devices #paper #books
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 gaining popularity and are
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traditional books.I
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 agree with
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i
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 will explain my
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justifications
justification
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justifications
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,
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gadgets namely the
smart phones
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, are becoming part of our daily life, because they
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not only satisfy only our
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issue
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 but
also
 can be used as educational tools.
For example
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book
 stingy,which in an app, you can find just
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one click and by typing a
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keyword
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key word
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, any
book
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soconds
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possessing
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possesing
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possessing
 those devices, people can have
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 of more free time in
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nature.
this
 is because you can take those devices everywhere, being portable and small.
therefore
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nature,
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 any more a restriction, compared with the days
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 when you had to go to the library and borrow it from there, which meant losing time commuting
besides
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 waiting for a
book
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 replacing
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books is their resistance over
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time. Due to the fact that they
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 in a huge
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database
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data base
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, the information cannot be deleted,as would happen with
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paper based
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 books. Researchers have found that the ink of the conventional
book
 vanishes and there is a huge risk of losing the information In conclusion,
although
 there are people that believe that the smell and the feeling you get when
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 a page
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 incomparable,
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 still believe that we should permit
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technology
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 our life
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