Children today play very violent games. This must be the reason for the increase in violence and crime in most major cities of the world. What are your opinions on this?

New online streaming platforms provide
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children
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wide range of computer
games
, which contain variations of
crime
and
violence
. Some people believe that
violence
in the major cities increased due to
effect
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of computer
games
. I believe that online
games
have affected
children
's behaviours and
this
changed the
crime
rates.
Children
tend to imitate what they see in
games
without questioning them.
Games
with
violence
give
children
an opportunity to discover
crime
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.
Moreover
,
children
cannot distinguish the results of
crime
, when they believe that it is just a game.
For example
, a
child
can get physical with their friends
as a result
of an unagreement without knowing the
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real life
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consequences of
violence
. We must teach
to
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children
, how to distinguish
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real life from
a
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virtual one.
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when a
child
plays
crime
games
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many hours. The problem is that
crime
games
are designed with so many details due to
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of reality.Because of these details, a
child
may learn how to commit a
crime
.
Therefore
, they get curious about how
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committing
commiting
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committing
a
crime
feels.
For instance
, if a
child
influenced
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by
games
, with the knowledge gained through
games
they can plan creative crimes.
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causes
the
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increase
of
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violence
in the cities because
police
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might face a unique
crime
and may not be able to find who
commit
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the
crime
. In conclusion,
violence
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computer
games
have a bad influence on
children
.
This
influence can cause
to
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the rise of
crime
in
the
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society. Parents must be aware
about
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the context of their
children
's
games
and examine these
games
before letting them play.
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