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Children today play very violent games. This must be the reason for the increase in violence and crime in most major cities of the world. What are your opinions on this?

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children
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a
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wide range of computer
games
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, which contain variations of
crime
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 and
violence
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. Some people believe that
violence
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 in the major cities increased due to
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 of computer
games
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. I believe that online
games
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 have affected
children
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's behaviours and
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 changed the
crime
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 rates.
Children
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 tend to imitate what they see in
games
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 without questioning them.
Games
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 with
violence
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 give
children
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 an opportunity to discover
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crime
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the crime
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.
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,
children
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 cannot distinguish the results of
crime
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, when they believe that it is just a game.
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, a
child
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 can get physical with their friends
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 of an unagreement without knowing the
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real life
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 consequences of
violence
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. We must teach
to
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children
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, how to distinguish
the
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real life from
a
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virtual one.
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 to the discussed point of view, another problem can get
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surface
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the surface
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 when a
child
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 plays
crime
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games
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so
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for so
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 many hours. The problem is that
crime
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games
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 are designed with so many details due to
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 of reality.Because of these details, a
child
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 may learn how to commit a
crime
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.
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, they get curious about how
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committing
commiting
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committing
 a
crime
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 feels.
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, if a
child
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influenced
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is influenced
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 by
games
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, with the knowledge gained through
games
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 they can plan creative crimes.
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 causes
the
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 increase
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in
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violence
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 in the cities because
police
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the police
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 might face a unique
crime
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 and may not be able to find who
commit
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committed
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 the
crime
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. In conclusion,
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violence
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violent
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 computer
games
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 have a bad influence on
children
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.
This
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 influence can cause
to
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the rise of
crime
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 in
the
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society. Parents must be aware
about
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 the context of their
children
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's
games
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 and examine these
games
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 before letting them play.
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