Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Recently, many people think that we have too many options to choose how to live our lives, but some say there are too many. I partially Agree with

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the reasons which will be discussed in the following paragraphs.

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with, I will acknowledge that there are many choices available to us today that we are lucky to have, and which undoubtedly make our lives better. Until recently, people could not choose who to marry or what job they would do, but nowadays we have a great degree of freedom in these regards, particularly in Western countries.

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, we have switched from limited and dictatorial societies to ones with countless options on offer, and

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creates some problems.

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, it can be a real problem when a person is not sure what she wants to choose which may lead to confession after all,

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may elaborate life and make it harder with a lot of stress, and

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may contribute to the individual's ability to make the decisions even the minor one,

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, those kids whose parents give them a lot of preferences, become hesitant and often end up choosing nothing. They later in their lives become more stressful and sometimes

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may lead to mental disorders.

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, as discussed in the above paragraphs I partially agree with the idea that the variety of choices may be harmful and have a negative impact on the individuals if not well attended to the circumstances of the person.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

255 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

overwhelmed
decision fatigue
paralysis by analysis
consumerism
globalization
personal autonomy
market saturation
option overload
decision-making process
psychological well-being
buyer's remorse
customization
trade-offs
minimalism
information superhighway

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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Fully explain your ideas

In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

ordinary people copy famous people whom they see on TV and magazines. Do you think it is a positive development?

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Some people think that teachers should be able to ask disruptive children to leave the class. Do you think it is the best way to deal with distruptive children in the classroom? What other solutions are there?

Many doctors recommend that older people exercise regularly, but most people do not follow an exercise routine. Why do you think this happens? How can people be encouraged to exercise regularly?