Some people believe more action can be taken to prevent crime, while others think that little can be done. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

The
crime
rate is still high in some countries and threatens normal life.
Although
It is argued whether it is unstoppable to preclude crimes because nearly nothing can solve the problem or whether we should do more and hope for people is remained, I am of the opinion that a significant change can be done. We can not change people’s behaviour and mindset.
In other words
, a considerable amount of crimes happen indoors by husbands or family members because of the raw between a married couple and the aggression.
For instance
, in countries like Uzbekistan or Kazakhstan despite the fact that a strict law exists, it does not stop men from killing and abusing their families and nothing could stop them since they are not frightened by going to prison.
As a result
, the
crime
rate does not drop and crimes are still happening as they used to be.
However
, the
death
penalty
can be a good solution, in my view. What I mean is, if we allow all the countries to use the
death
penalty
for those who murder people others probably would think twice before committing the
crime
. In Kazakhstan, as an example, the
crime
rate is higher than in China because Kazakhstan's government forbids
this
method of punishment while in China is it commonly used.
This
shows that the
death
penalty
works and prevents a great number of homicides. In conclusion,
although
some people are devastated and scared of their conditions, there is still a chance to stop both domestic violence and murder by implementing of
death
penalty
regularly.
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