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To what extent do you agree that computers and other kinds of digital technology are both a benefit and a problem? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

Computers and digital technology today are essential to every type of
organization
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. Institutions must adapt to new technologies to be profitable and sustainable, but the community is becoming dependent on these technologies, and health problems are being generated for the nation. Today's institutions must quickly adapt to new technological trends because they are more than an essential tool for them to be profitable and sustainable over
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. The need to have all the operations of a company
digitized
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 means that they are connected to the world
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 these companies cannot be oblivious to
globalization
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the
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commercialization
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 of products and services is simpler and more agile via the Internet, and they can be contacted anywhere in the world to do business.
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, a benefit for small businesses is to use applications or social networks to market their services and products,
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 as Facebook, YouTube, WhatsApp, and others.
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 technology streamlines the
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 of its products and services for
organizations
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 worldwide.
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 it is true, computers and other digital media are a benefit for both small and large-scale
organizations
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.
This
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 advanced technology can become a problem for humanity
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 dependent on computer games, social networks, and others, people spend many hours spending their generation on
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 automation, and very shortly they will suffer from different diseases
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 as pathological gambling, eating disorders
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 not eating at the right times, lack of concentration in studies and
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 low academic performance. In conclusion, computers and new machinery are a benefit for new
organizations
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 because they make them more profitable and sustainable over time.
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, these new machines are generators of dependency in society
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 at the same time generate health problems in society.

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Make sure to clearly state your opinion in the introduction and summarize it in the conclusion.
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Use linking words like 'however', 'firstly', 'for example' to help the flow of the essay.
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Add more specific examples or statistics to support your points, making them stronger.
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You provided a good balance of both benefits and problems related to digital technology.
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Your examples of social media and small businesses were relevant and easy to understand.

Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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