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Many people argue that restaurants should be required to disclose the nutritional information of the dishes they serve. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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The idea that restaurants ought to reveal the secret about the amount of ingredients in each
dish
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 and the way they are cooked has always been controversial. I personally think it has both advantages and disadvantages but, the disadvantages outweigh the advantages. To talk about its pros,
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 it can be mentioned that informing customers about the foods' nutritional information has some positive points. The nutritional information of a
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 is possible to be attached to the menu,
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, customers are easily able to access the recipe of the
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 they are being served. It might result in several benefits for some groups.
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, a few individuals are allergic to a special material
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 used in that food and it is not visible.
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٫athletes have a special diet and it is necessary for them to be aware of what they are eating.
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, it might be a good improvement in the food industry.
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, releasing data about a
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 has its own drawbacks and cons. If a restaurant would like to do it, they will definitely have to employ a new employee to estimate the amount of each
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’s ingredients. It actually would be a time-consuming job in the food industry because chefs and other staff are required to take prompt action.
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, another reason that makes
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 process impossible is that great chefs usually do not measure everything which is added, in fact, they put their experience into action. In conclusion, I take
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 view that its demerits don’t always outweigh its merits and in a few cases might be probably equal and each manager should consider the situation.

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Task Achievement
Make sure your introduction clearly presents the topic and your position. A more direct sentence stating your opinion can enhance clarity.
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Develop your main ideas further with more detailed examples. Each paragraph should have a clear main idea followed by supporting details and examples to make your argument stronger.
Coherence and Cohesion
Work on structuring your essay more logically. The transition between paragraphs should be smooth, and each paragraph should focus on a single main idea.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure your conclusion summarizes your main points and reinforces your overall argument. It should clearly reflect the opinion you stated in your introduction.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Nutritional information
  • Calorie count
  • Public health
  • Informed choices
  • Accountability
  • Dietary requirements
  • Logistics
  • Analyzing
  • Unhealthy ingredients
  • Consumer
  • Health outcomes
  • Gluten-free
  • Overemphasis
  • Comprehensive understanding
  • Dining experience
  • Clinical experience
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