IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 7

Some people say that now we can see films on our phones and tabletd there is no need to go to the cinema. Others says that to fully enjoy, go to cinema. Discuss both views and provide your opinion?

#people #films #phones #tabletd #cinema
In
this
 contemporary era, the mass population believe that a
movie
 can only be enjoyed when watched at the
cinema
. Whereas, few argue that technology has distinctly advanced which makes TV or tablet a resourceful mode to watch a
movie
.
This
 essay will articulate both perspectives and
finally
 form an opinion that why watching a film at the
cinema
 is more mesmerizing. To commence with, nowadays people are so entangled in their office routine and house chores that they start compromising their health.
This
 leads to the elevation of their stress to a critical level that eventually makes them mentally sick. Watching a
movie
 at the
cinema
 plays a vital role in reducing stress as a person comes out of his daily routine and enjoys his time. To epitome, the director (Michael Smith) of the
movie
 " Lord of the Rings" proclaimed that he watched his
movie
 three times on television before it got released in
cinema
 and rated it 6 out of 10 but when watched it at the
cinema
, he rated it 10 because the experience he got while watching at the
cinema
 was exceptional.
This
 recapitulates that movies watched at the
cinema
 give you a different level of enjoyment as you leave behind all the stress and just focus on the film.
On the contrary
, technology has immensely advanced, now the TVs are well equipped with crystal clear screens and atmos surround sound.
As a result
, the quality of movies you can enjoy at home is similar to the
cinema
.
For instance
, LG Inc. has launched a television with a 100" inch screen with 16 surround speaker systems which
allows
Change the verb form
allow
show examples
 customers an experience of
cinema
 while sitting at home. In a nutshell, I pen down saying that if the televisions are that well advanced, why do people still prefer going to the
cinema
? The answer is that humans demand a break in their life and wants to eradicate the stressful routine of work and home which is wishfully met at the
cinema
 hall.
Submitted by acca_fahad on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: