A growing number of people feel that natural areas should not be exploited by people, and that they should be left as they are, while others argue that humans must use this land to satisfy their various needs, including farming and building. discuss both the views and give your opinion?

Many people believe that untouched virgin lands should be commercialised while other feel
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should be untouched. Human demands are never ending and the
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existing
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resources are scarce which would require more and more exploitation of
land
to fulfil the needs,
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I strongly believe that using entire
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will leave future
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with nothing but
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over exploited
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resources.
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, the growing population each day has to be fed and
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accommodated
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accommodated
as much of the population can't afford regular meals.
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in economic activities will help generate more revenue which will help in
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of existing human conditions.
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The
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survey society of India says that more than 50
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of
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is
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underutilised
, proper
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management and sustainable planning can solve
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e human is motivated by greed not
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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