Even through experts believe that walking is a great way to improve one's health, very few people walk nowadays. Why are not people walking? What can be done to encourage them to walk more?
There are many ways to ameliorate
person's
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a person's
health
and professional people
presume that walking is a
best way for Change the article
the
this
. But a small number of people
walk. There are lots of reasons which
Correct word choice
why
people
do not walk such
as using automobile
, online shopping and incorrect strategies for Fix the agreement mistake
automobiles
weigh
loss. Correct your spelling
weight
This
essay describes reasons and some solutions to persuade people
to walk more. Firstly
, mechanical life causes people
use
automobile and public transportation for commuting and everybody prefer to Add the particle
to use
use
them instead
of walking. On the other hand
, with the development of technology, people
inclined
to buy online shopping and pay bills by mobile phone apps. Add a missing verb
are inclined
For example
, in the past , people
had to go the
bank Change preposition
to the
for paying
bills and withdraw money Change preposition
to pay
for
this
reason everyone often walk
to the nearest bank. Wrong verb form
walked
Moreover
, people
walked to buy everythings
in Correct your spelling
everything
old
days but today everybody especially Correct article usage
the old
youth
generation Correct article usage
the youth
prefer
to buy Change the verb form
prefers
by
online shopping and they do not walk. In addition, as far as I have seen a lot of advertisements Change preposition
apply
which is
Verb problem
that
used
Wrong verb form
use
from
incorrect strategies about Change preposition
apply
health
body. Correct article usage
the health
For example
, there are many companies which claim that with consume
their products Wrong verb form
consuming
help
to lose Correct subject-verb agreement
helps
people
's weight without walking and doing exercise. As a result, people
prefer to use
their products instead
of walking. In term
of some views, Fix the agreement mistake
terms
people
should be encouraged to follow the correct ways to maintain their health
. Firstly
, increasing fossil fuel may be good
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a good
solutions
which Fix the agreement mistake
solution
people
walk
and Fix the infinitive
to walk
use
less their vehicles. They may walk to go bus station or subway station, as
a result, they may walk to their destinations. Correct word choice
and as
Secondly
, banks and online shopping can put restrictions on their websites and mobile apps which
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so that
people
can not pay for everythings
. Correct your spelling
everything
For
this
reason, everyone have
to go there and buy. Change the verb form
has
Thirdly
, experts should inform people
about the side effects of consuming products which help to lose weight and improve health
and they can explain the benefits of walking. In conclusion, as I mentioned earlier, mechanical life and using technology such
as online shopping and mobile applications cause people
do
not walk. Correct your spelling
to
Also
, people
are encouraged to walk more by
some ways including increasing fossil fuel, putting restrictions on online shopping and informing Change preposition
in
people
from
Change preposition
about
benefits
of walking.Correct article usage
the benefits
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