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Nowadays, in several nations, industries and businesses are moving to the countryside rather than big cities encouraged by the authorities.
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essay will examine the advantages and disadvantages of the government's regulation and provide a logical conclusion
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one is better. The two main advantages are a boost in the local economy and more varied job opportunities.
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, metropolitan societies that have consumerism
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tend to spend money on
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range of local services, including houses, transportation, and food daily. While
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native villagers tend to save money as they have a simple life rather than city dwellers.
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population adjustment leads to
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additional significant income in
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.
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, the movement increases the level of employment rates as
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businesses needed a lot of employees to run daily tasks. Meanwhile, a lot of skilled employees were imported from
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other cities to
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larger demands in housing workers, transportation drivers, and restaurant staff that need to manage very well with loads of
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. Moving into another district
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has some major disadvantages like
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of the environment and increases
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crime rates. Generally, the industries that tried to exploit natural resources impacted the local natural life.
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, the authorities deploy green regulations for each company that exploits
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local resources.
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, impose
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tax
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to bring more funds to build green
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.
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, humans can
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create more serious situations where criminal issues are involved. The presence of a considerable number of employees with a lot of money to spend, and often carrying valuables
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as cutting-edge gadgets and cars, increases the attraction for criminals to do
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. To conclude, despite the destructive effect of the environment and
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of
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rate, it actually can be managed by increasing awareness of paying
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and developing safer securities. It
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has an extremely beneficial impact on the local economy with wider jobs for the local people. I believe that
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benefits of regulations outweigh
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drawbacks.
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