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Writing Samples
Band 8

You have been facing a lot of issues at work lately. Write a letter to your Reporting Manager informing him about this. In your letter: • Explain what / who is affecting your work and people's attitude towards you • What your expectations are from this work/office • How / what your manager can do to help you with these problems You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

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Dear Madam, I am writing
this
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 to you regarding the issue that I have been facing at work.
Although
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 I believe that the company provides necessary job security for each staff,
however
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, I have been facing several levels of threat from my direct manager and I think it's time you became aware of it. Over the past three months, I have gotten messages from my colleagues about how my manager talks badly about me and how he states clearly that he is going to terminate my employment before the end of the year. Meanwhile, I have been doing my work diligently, meeting up with tasks and contributing effectively to the company's growth. As a big organization, I expect it to support my dream and career progress, especially serving as an experience accumulator.
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, I look forward to learning a lot from working in
this
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 company,
instead
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, it has been the opposite. As a solution, and because I love the organization's core values, I would appreciate it if I could be transferred to another branch within the city so that I can focus on my training without any unwarranted distractions from my superiors. Thanks for your understanding. Yours faithfully, Moses.

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task achievement
Consider providing more specific examples or evidence to support your claims, especially regarding your manager's behavior and its impact on your work.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea for clearer structure. Consider splitting the second paragraph into two parts: one about the issues faced and the other on expectations from the organization.
coherence cohesion
The letter begins and ends with a polite and appropriate greeting and closing, which is suitable for a formal letter.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is respectful and formal, fitting for communication with a manager.
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