Many people are optimistic about the 21st century and expect scientists to make positive changes to the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with their optimism? What changes do you like to see in your new century?

Although
being an optimist is beneficial for the well-being of every individual, it is
also
very important to be realistic. In the case of predictions for the 21st century, not expecting too many changes in the world from
scientists
may make me seem like a pessimist, but I consider it
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realistic.
To begin
with, if we simply look at the past inventions that
scientists
made, the way they affected our day-to-day life is far worse than expected. Even tho,
this
probably was not their intention, they could have predicted it. A clear example of
this
is social media. I considered that the disadvantages
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the advantages. If we look at the effect that they are having on the population, especially the younger population, it is clear to see that social networking has a rather bad effect on them.
Secondly
, I consider that
scientists
are not trying to solve the problem overall, but more so to make it seem like they are. An example of
this
is the invention of air cleaners.
Although
this
does resolve the problem that an individual is having it does not resolve the problem altogether,
furthermore
it makes it even worse. A change that I would really like to see is
scientists
focusing more on environmental issues like
this
one.
On the other hand
, it is widely known that
scientists
are capable of making really good changes. By
this
I mean we have seen them make amazing inventions
such
as recycling.
This
has helped our environmental issues a lot. To conclude, even tho
scientists
have not been focusing their knowledge on the right things it's never late to have a change of direction and make positive changes in the world. For
this
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is still have hope.
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