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You live near a recreation ground. A local school brings pupils to the recreation ground to do sports, such as football and cricket, but recently this caused some problems. Write to the head of the school. -explain why you enjoy living by the recreation ground -describe the recent problems -and say what you think the school should do.

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Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Erica and I live
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 Green Street, across the street from the main entrance to Central Park where your
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students
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 often have
sports
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 practice and matches. I am writing to raise my concern regarding your
school
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 making
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 do
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 at the recreation
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 which is around where I live. Living by the recreation
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 is really convenient for me to do some physical exercise and keep me relaxed. But now it is occupied by your
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 pupils. I have no idea why your
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 takes
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 to the recreation
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. In fact, their coming has greatly influenced our usual activities. I can think of several negative consequences of
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 doing
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 on our recreational grounds.
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, the leisure
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 is becoming overcrowded.
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, people living around the
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 , including me , not having a place to do some outdoor activities. Which may result in
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developing
devloping
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developing
 a sedentary lifestyle and causes health problems.
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, the noise when
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 were doing
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 made me feel bothered.
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, idle fitness instruments are
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 becoming less and less. I believe
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 faithfully Erica Xia

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