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Nowadays people live longer after they retire. How does this affect individuals and society? What can be done about this?

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Today some
people
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 more live after finishing
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. It will discuss
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 question and suggest the best solution.
Initially
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 part of
people
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 after years and finishing the
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 might live for many years.
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,
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 society needs to some things
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 as medical service excersice place and other things. While the
government
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 should give
facilities
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 to these
people
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. For ,instance oxford university's recent finding that the person who lives longer finished
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 might bring a growing number of
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 who needs medical services and hospitals about 30%.
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,laking the
facilities
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 in medical places increased for treatment. The main solution for
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 issue using part of the
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's income to create a new medical place for them.
moreover
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this
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 service can support retired
people
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. For ,example Canadian
government
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 recently find that creat new hospitals should decline the number of
people
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 who are more age and need medical services, by about 40%.
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 age group raise more than others for medical services. Principal programs to help
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 person after creating a new hospital, using part of the parks assigned to them.
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,
this
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 place can VIP for these
people
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. In conclusion, some
people
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 after finishing
work
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 are willing to have more
facilities
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 and medical needs.
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 age group not only want medical service but
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 is willing to others
facilities
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. The
government
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 can be done answer
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 problem is easy. It will suggest using either tax resources or
government
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 income to solve
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 issue.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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