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Band 4

Some business prohibit smoking in any of their offices. Some governments have banned smoking in all public places. Do you agree or disagree?

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Today, some campaigns have banned smoke prevention. Other countries have
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 banned smoking. I am absolutely against smoking
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 because smoke is harmful to
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. In
this
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 essay, I will tell you about the negative consequences of smoking. On the one hand, it
lead
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 to bad consequences. It can kill
people
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. Smoking can affect not only the lives of
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the smoker
a smoker
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smoker
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smokers
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 but
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 non-smokers.
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, a non-smoker might work in the same room as a smoker. The toxic
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substance
substances
substanse
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substance
 coming out of
cigarette
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 has a bad effect on his
health
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. Heart and lung diseases are often found in
people
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 who smoked.
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, the
air
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 is clean in all countries where smoking is prohibited.
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 why there are no dangers to
people
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's lives in those countries, and the
air
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 is
cleans
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. The cleaner the
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, the healthier all the plants there will grow.
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 the food will not be damaged.
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, if the
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 is polluted, it will
affected
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 the food and
people
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's lives.
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,
consumption
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the consumption
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 of poisonous food affects the
health
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 of both adults and children. In a nutshell, it is better to ban smoking in all public places and offices. Every government should protect human
health
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 and nature.
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Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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