Some people think that dangerous sports such as boxing or motor-racing should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Some
people
believe that smoking is very harmful that's why several
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forbid smoking and some executives have prohibited smoking in all popular
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.In my opinion,smoking must
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in all
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and created some low about don't
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.
Firstly
,
this
essay agrees that smoking
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is very good for
countries
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environment and
secondly
,smoking banned is beneficial for
people
's health. On the one hand,there is a
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of
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of smoking forbid because the smell of cigarettes isn't clean and destroyed clean air.For
this
reason,it helps
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a good
environmental
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because all
place
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will be clean and pure through make
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illegal
illegaled
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illegal
of smoking.A prime example,according to the data,smoking caused to produce various
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toxics
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for nature
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moreover
,according to
the
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scientists,China is prohibited smoking that's why it's nature is very beautiful and very pure and after
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there will be development in the country.
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,smoking banned everywhere isn't negative
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because it has created
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effect
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for
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individuals
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health.From my way of thinking, it causes many diseases.
This
is a glaring example,according to the study,these days smoking causes many
people
's death and for
this
reason,according to ecologists point that,60%
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perished
and
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nowadays many young
people
begin smoking very early and that's why they
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being
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a
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sick from a young age. In conclusion,many provinces stopped smoking in all public places and several
occupation
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prohibited it ,
thus
many governments created a new rule
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because smoking causes many problems.From my point of view,
this
law is very beneficial for all countries being beautiful and their citizen's health will be good and by
this
means all kinds of conditions are prevented everywhere.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary
  • engagement
  • incentives
  • obesity
  • recreation
  • well-being
  • peer pressure
  • physical fitness
  • endurance
  • balance
  • teamwork
  • coordination
  • confidence
  • self-esteem
  • discipline
  • facilities
  • accessible
  • affordable
  • curriculum
  • extracurricular
  • inclusion
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