Some people think that dangerous sports such as boxing or motor-racing should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Some

people

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believe that smoking is very harmful that's why several

occupation

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forbid smoking and some executives have prohibited smoking in all popular

spot

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.In my opinion,smoking must

banned

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be banned

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in all

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and created some low about don't

smoking

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smoke

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.

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,

this

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essay agrees that smoking

banned

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ban

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is very good for

countries

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environment and

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,smoking banned is beneficial for

people

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's health. On the one hand,there is a

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of

beneficial

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of smoking forbid because the smell of cigarettes isn't clean and destroyed clean air.For

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reason,it helps

being

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a good

environmental

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because all

place

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places

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will be clean and pure through make

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illegal

illegaled

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illegal

of smoking.A prime example,according to the data,smoking caused to produce various

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toxins

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toxics

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toxins

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for nature

and

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moreover

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,according to

the

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scientists,China is prohibited smoking that's why it's nature is very beautiful and very pure and after

that

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there will be development in the country.

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,smoking banned everywhere isn't negative

aspects

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because it has created

negative

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effect

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for

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individuals

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health.From my way of thinking, it causes many diseases.

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is a glaring example,according to the study,these days smoking causes many

people

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's death and for

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reason,according to ecologists point that,60%

individuals

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perished

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nowadays many young

people

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begin smoking very early and that's why they

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are

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being

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a

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sick from a young age. In conclusion,many provinces stopped smoking in all public places and several

occupation

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occupations

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prohibited it ,

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many governments created a new rule

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because smoking causes many problems.From my point of view,

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law is very beneficial for all countries being beautiful and their citizen's health will be good and by

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means all kinds of conditions are prevented everywhere.