Scientist and technology experts seem to be more valued by modern society than musicians and artist. To what extent do you agree.

In
this
ambitious world, people have different desires, a lot enjoy studying science, while others want to sing. Nowadays, nations are giving more value and interest to technology rather than singing and art. In my opinion, at some point,
this
is true and we should continue providing more power to these fields because it is the way to change the future into a better place.
Firstly
, in the
last
century, especially the
last
10 years, obviously everything has changed. Governments are always trying their best to fund technological studies because they believe it deserves more.
For instance
, in some countries they decreased the taxes on modern cars since it they have fewer emissions.
On the other hand
, universities are giving scholarships in science sectors more than music or art.
However
, current studies show that one of the highest salaries is for scientists and experts,
although
their work isn't that hard but complicated.
On the other hand
, funding and overvaluing scientists and other experts don't mean
stopping
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taking care of art and particularly musicians and artists. Even though other fields are more essential, but still melody represents culture.
For example
, villages are still using the old fashion musical instruments at their weddings, as much as they can and always avoid
this
modern musical.
Furthermore
, authorities not only have to fund modern studies but
also
musicians and artists. In conclusion, whilst I feel both sectors have merit, I still believe that technological sectors must have more interest than others because it is more involved in general health and population
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