Scientist and technology experts seem to be more valued by modern society than musicians and artist. To what extent do you agree.

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ambitious world, people have different desires, a lot enjoy studying science, while others want to sing. Nowadays, nations are giving more value and interest to technology rather than singing and art. In my opinion, at some point,

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is true and we should continue providing more power to these fields because it is the way to change the future into a better place.

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century, especially the

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10 years, obviously everything has changed. Governments are always trying their best to fund technological studies because they believe it deserves more.

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, in some countries they decreased the taxes on modern cars since it they have fewer emissions.

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, universities are giving scholarships in science sectors more than music or art.

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, current studies show that one of the highest salaries is for scientists and experts,

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their work isn't that hard but complicated.

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, funding and overvaluing scientists and other experts don't mean

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taking care of art and particularly musicians and artists. Even though other fields are more essential, but still melody represents culture.

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, villages are still using the old fashion musical instruments at their weddings, as much as they can and always avoid

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modern musical.

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, authorities not only have to fund modern studies but

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musicians and artists. In conclusion, whilst I feel both sectors have merit, I still believe that technological sectors must have more interest than others because it is more involved in general health and population

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Scientist and technology experts seem to be more valued by modern society than musicians and artist. To what extent do you agree.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

Some people think that children should only read academic book. Other believe that reading books for pleasure is equally important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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