Some feel that individuals should try to assimilate completely to the country where they live while others feel it is more important to preserve their native culture. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Today most
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are migrating to another
country
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which that it may cause to lose their own traditions. It is felt by some
people
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that
people
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should try to assimilate completely into the new
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where they migrated while it is felt by others that it is more significant to preserve their own traditions.
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essay will carefully examine the issues in order to give my opinion in the following paragraphs. There is much evidence to show that completely assimilating into a new
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is the best option to protect the values.
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, those who are not living in their mother
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need to adapt to new nations.
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they can learn the language and take part in their communities.
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that they can easily get permanent residence in the
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.
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, they may lose their own
tradition
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because of the adaptation. And so we see how adapting to new
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shows to be the best option to protect the values.
On the other hand
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, there is other evidence which seems to show that maintaining the own
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is the better way to protect values.
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, most south Asian
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maintain their own traditions in whatever
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they live in. Because they believed that
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is the most important icon of their nationality.
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,they may not lose their
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as well as their language. we see
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how other evidence demonstrates that maintaining their own
culture
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is the better way to protect their
culture
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. We saw from the above how the
tradition
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was lost. We
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saw how it is felt by some
people
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that
people
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should try to assimilate completely into a new
country
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while it is felt by others that maintaining the
culture
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is most significant to preserve. Having discussed the issues carefully it is my opinion that maintaining the own
culture
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is the better way to protect the
culture
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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