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Some feel that individuals should try to assimilate completely to the country where they live while others feel it is more important to preserve their native culture. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Today most
people
 are migrating to another
country
 which that it may cause to lose their own traditions. It is felt by some
people
 that
people
 should try to assimilate completely into the new
country
 where they migrated while it is felt by others that it is more significant to preserve their own traditions.
This
 essay will carefully examine the issues in order to give my opinion in the following paragraphs. There is much evidence to show that completely assimilating into a new
country
 is the best option to protect the values.
For example
, those who are not living in their mother
country
 need to adapt to new nations.
Then
 they can learn the language and take part in their communities.
As a result
 that they can easily get permanent residence in the
country
.
However
, they may lose their own
tradition
 because of the adaptation. And so we see how adapting to new
country
 shows to be the best option to protect the values.
On the other hand
, there is other evidence which seems to show that maintaining the own
tradition
 is the better way to protect values.
For example
, most south Asian
people
 maintain their own traditions in whatever
country
 they live in. Because they believed that
culture
 is the most important icon of their nationality.
As a result
 ,they may not lose their
tradition
 as well as their language. we see
also
 how other evidence demonstrates that maintaining their own
culture
 is the better way to protect their
culture
. We saw from the above how the
tradition
 was lost. We
also
 saw how it is felt by some
people
 that
people
 should try to assimilate completely into a new
country
 while it is felt by others that maintaining the
culture
 is most significant to preserve. Having discussed the issues carefully it is my opinion that maintaining the own
culture
 is the better way to protect the
culture
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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