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Most experiences in our lives that seemed difficult at the time become valuable lessons for the future. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

#experiences #lives #time #lessons #future
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 we have
a
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many difficult
experiences
. Most
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feels
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 hard at that
time
.
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, in the
future
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 these
experiences
 become
a
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precious to
the
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that person. I agree with the given statement and give
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a reasons
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 and
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a
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prefect
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body
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First
 and foremost, a number of
people
 have tough events in their lives that seem difficult at that
time
 but in the
future
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 these events become precious as they learn a lesson from these and become successful in
future
. Explain
furthermore
, most
of
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successful
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people
 get success by
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 from their mistakes.
For example
, a study by the university of Tokyo reviled that most
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of
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wealthy
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 and successful
people
 said that
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a
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failure
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are
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 the best way to become successful.
Thus
, these
experiences
 are precious.
Moreover
, most of the
time
 we face hard times because of their small and big mistakes.
However
, these become good memories in the
future
 and they feel good in
future
. As they remember
their
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time
 when they start their career.
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, an article published by
Times
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 of Newyork says that most
high level
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people
 said that
time
 when they do their
first
 job is
most
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the most
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 valuable
time
 to them. They
also
 said that they feel difficult
that
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time
. In conclusion,
i
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 agree with it because these
experiences
 are precious as they become good memories and teach us good lessons.
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

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