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Your friend would like to visit you, but unfortunately you are not free when they want to come. Write a letter to your friend. Apologise Explain why you are busy Suggest another time

#friend #visit #apologise #time
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The bar chart compares the frequency of
fast-food
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 consumption by
USA
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US
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 citizens
over
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from 2003 to 2013. It is clear that most people in the USA used to eat one or more
time
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times
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every
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evert
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every
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 month in one of
the
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fast-food
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restaurants
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., going to those
restaurants
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 every day rarely occurred. In 2003, more than 30% of individuals were going out to eat
fast-food
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 once a week, and in 2006 eating
this
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 way reached its highest level to 33% of USA people.
However
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, in 2013,
this
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 figure dropped to
be
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only
at
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27%.
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, visiting
restaurants
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which
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that
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 present
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fast-food
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fast food
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 once or twice a month was at 33% in 2013 which is 3% higher than in 2003. Purchasing fast food in
restaurants
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 several times a week was
the
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higher in 2006 by 20% than in 2003 and 2013 by 17 and 16% respectively.
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, less than 5% went to
fast-food
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 facilities every day during the period from 2003 to 2013. Over the ten-year period, eating at those places a few times was below or equal to 15%. There was a
percent
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 of people who never ate
at
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there and they were below 5%.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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