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With a growing world population one of the most pressing issue is that of feeding such a large number of people. Some people think that GM foods offer a viable solution to this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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World
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 is facing the problem of overpopulation and giving
foods
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food
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 to these people is
crucial
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 matter nowadays. As with the increase in
growth
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the growth
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 rate of people the difficulty in feeding them
also
 arises so, according to
narrative
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the narrative
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 of some individuals genetically modified foods give an answer to all these issues. I partially agree with the given statement because
this
 is the need of
the
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time to shift towards a viable solution
of
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this
 problem. On the one hand, GM foodstuff has a plethora of benefits and some will be discussed here.
Firstly
, they are resistant to pesticides, viruses and other diseases as the genes of these crops, vegetables and fruits are encoded for the better and desired features.
For example
, the shelf life of
corns
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corn
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 and potatoes
are
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now
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 longer due to the alterations in their genetics.
Secondly
, their
nutrients
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 levels are improved because of changes made in their DNA, like golden rice has more nutrients than normal rice
thus
 it fulfils the requirement of vitamins in the body.
Thirdly
, the flavour and attractiveness of crops are enhanced in the process of genetic engineering as the colour of
apple
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apples
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 and cherries are extra bright and beautiful when they are produced through
this
 process.
On the contrary
,
drawbacks
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 of
GM related
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GM-related
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 items are primarily, the contaminations
it
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they
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cause
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 to the surrounding environment are very dangerous
for example
, other insects and plants that feed from these harvests can get their
DNA's
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DNA
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 as altered and which could have
an adverse effects
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an adverse effect
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 on the food chain.
Moreover
, it
also
 creates negative impacts on the health of humans
and
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some can even get allergic reactions while others could
diagnosed
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be diagnosed
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 with cancer. It can
also
 create antibacterial resistance in a person's body due to which his reaction to certain diseases will be changed. In conclusion, after discussing both
the
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views, I believe that genetically bioengineered products could be used to a certain extent
however
, more research is required in
this
 field to overcome its drawbacks.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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