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More and more people are buying through the online shopping in last decade. Do you think, it is positive or negative development

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More and more
people
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online shopping in
last
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 decade. Do you think, it is
positive
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 or negative development Over the
last
 10 years, the demand towards purchasing
products
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 the aid of the internet has increased. From my point of view, buying things through
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online shopping is a positive development since it creates many opportunities for humans and
this
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first
 reason why
this
 is positive is that
people
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might
migh
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might
 be able to save more time by purchasing
products
 through online websites or
shops
 since technologies have created
a
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countless opportunities for individuals to do
variety
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 of tasks with
ina
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 a short
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 of time just by studying at home by the aid of the internet.
Moreover
, it is
also
 considered one of the comfortable ways of shopping since there are a variety of
products
are
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available
on
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the
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online
shops
 which you may not be able to find in local markets.
For example
, nowadays majority of
people
 try to purchase international
merchandises
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through
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online
that is
 not available in local
shops
.
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Furthermore
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, another main reason is that
online
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 shopping system provides a delivery service that can be useful in
a lockdown conditions
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lockdown conditions
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 when
people
 are obliged to stay indoors.
For instance
, in the UK during Covid-19 the rate of users who purchased
products
 through
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online
shops
have
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 significantly increased. To conclude, having weighed everything mentioned
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, I can come to the conclusion with that shopping online is not a negative development in human history,
instead
, it allows us to purchase multinational goods
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 a very affordable price.
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