More and more people are buying through the online shopping in the last decade.. Do you think, it is positive or negative development.

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• In our modern life, technology has been developing for 10 years. So the majority of individuals prefer to

purchase

new

things

by online shopping rather

then

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than

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go to the market

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apply

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because it is extremely easy and comfortable for everyone. As a matter of

fact

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many people

using

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the

internet

to buy something. In

this

essay, I will discuss the position and negative

effects

of online shopping. From my point of view, It is one of the best ways to

purchase

products

especially

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clothes

through the

internet

. • There is no doubt that

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there are many positive

effects

than negative

effects

of buying new

things

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online shopping. One of the most positive

effects

are

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everybody is able to

purchase

products

especially

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clothes

without difficulties. As a matter of fact, nowadays many people try to buy

clothes

on the

internet

and there are

have

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a lot of high-quality

products

and all

products

are

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inexpensive

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unexpensive

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inexpensive

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that

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it is extremely fast and efficient. So all individuals are able to choose

products

such

clothes

, daily

things

and

such

items through

see

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seeing

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that

things

pictures on the

internet

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instance

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purchase

a new smartphone for myself by online shopping because many humans recommend

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apply

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buy all my

things

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apply

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this

way and since that day I buy all my

products

on the

internet

. • To be sure, there are

have

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some negative

effects

of buying

products

by online shopping.

First

of all, there is no opportunity to try on the product before buying it and

secondly

deliver

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delivery

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service might be

delay

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a delay

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in the arrival of

products

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example

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a couple of years ago my best friend

buying

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bought

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a new dress for her

mother

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mother's

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birthday party as a gift

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through

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online shopping and they deliver

this

product within two weeks. But they have to bring it within two days.

Thus

online shopping is not very beneficial for everyone. • In

final

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analysis, despite the fact that online shopping is a popular new trend and everybody

prefer

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prefers

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purchases

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purchase

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things

rather

then

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than

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go to the market. Because it is very fast and efficient. For

this

reason, I am convinced that online shopping is a positive development in general.

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