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More and more people are buying through the online shopping in the last decade.. Do you think, it is positive or negative development.

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• In our modern life, technology has been developing for 10 years. So the majority of individuals prefer to
purchase
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 new
things
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 by online shopping rather
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then
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 go to the market
,
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 because it is extremely easy and comfortable for everyone. As a matter of
fact
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 many people
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 the
internet
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 to buy something. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss the position and negative
effects
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 of online shopping. From my point of view, It is one of the best ways to
purchase
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products
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especially
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clothes
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 through the
internet
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. • There is no doubt that
,
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 there are many positive
effects
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 than negative
effects
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 of buying new
things
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by
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 online shopping. One of the most positive
effects
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are
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 everybody is able to
purchase
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products
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especially
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clothes
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 without difficulties. As a matter of fact, nowadays many people try to buy
clothes
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 on the
internet
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 and there are
have
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a lot of high-quality
products
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 and all
products
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 are
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inexpensive
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unexpensive
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inexpensive
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.
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that
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 it is extremely fast and efficient. So all individuals are able to choose
products
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,
such
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 as
clothes
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, daily
things
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 and
such
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 items through
see
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 that
things
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 pictures on the
internet
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 I
purchase
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 a new smartphone for myself by online shopping because many humans recommend
me
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to
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buy all my
things
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on
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this
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 way and since that day I buy all my
products
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 on the
internet
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. • To be sure, there are
have
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some negative
effects
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 of buying
products
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 by online shopping.
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 of all, there is no opportunity to try on the product before buying it and
secondly
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deliver
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 service might be
delay
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a delay
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 in the arrival of
products
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example
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 a couple of years ago my best friend
buying
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bought
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 a new dress for her
mother
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mother's
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 birthday party as a gift
by
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 online shopping and they deliver
this
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 product within two weeks. But they have to bring it within two days.
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 online shopping is not very beneficial for everyone. • In
final
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 analysis, despite the fact that online shopping is a popular new trend and everybody
prefer
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 to
purchases
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purchase
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things
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 rather
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then
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than
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 go to the market. Because it is very fast and efficient. For
this
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 reason, I am convinced that online shopping is a positive development in general.
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