Boxing is a blood sport which often results in physical injury. It is inappropriate for this sport to exist in the modern age. Do you agree or disagree?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • blood sport
  • physical injury
  • inappropriate
  • modern age
  • violent
  • serious injuries
  • civilized
  • dangerous
  • sporting activities
  • promoting health
  • well-being
  • encouraging violence
  • culture of aggression
  • harm
  • alternative forms
  • combat sports
  • safety
  • skill
  • banning
  • regulating
  • protect athletes
  • unnecessary harm
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