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Some people think that modern technology has more negative effects on our lives than positive ones. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays,
people
 think social media like Instagram, Facebook, WhatsUp, and other web have many negative effects on real
life
. I partially disagree with
this
 issue, and I will explain the benefits and
problems
 in
this
 essay. Social media have a lot of
problems
 in real
life
 because they cause
people
 to lose focus on
life
 and not pay attention to errands.
For instance
, when
people
 go to Instagram they see many
people
 saying lies and they believe that they are true and they want to change their
life
 based on the story seen on Instagram.while they have a good effect on real
life
 .
For example
,
people
 can see their friends in another world and they can talk together. On the other ,hand they can access easy to anything they want and find a lot of essays about their
problems
.
In addition
, they can understand the news for the world.
However
, I think these causes have a good effect but they have a bad effect on the heart because some news makes
people
 get depression . To sum up, when
life
 goes to modern technology they should have a lot of
problems
 but they learn to work with technology in the true way they help folk to improve their
life
 and better future in the world.
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