Some peop/e think it is no longer necessary /'or children fo go fo school because ffiey can do all their learning on//ne. Others gei/ev’e learning in schools is essential. Discuss both views and give yot/r opinion.

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It is said that
children
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are under no obligation to go to
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because of the development of studying online. Some people,
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, argue that it is indispensable for
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to study at
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. From my perspective, I am in
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of the latter view. On the one hand, long-distant learning brings
students
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a host of merits.
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of all, they could save a lot of time and money as they do not need to commute to
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. Some
students
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have to queue to get on the bus heading to
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so that
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it
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wastes much
time
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rather than setting up the computer and
study
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.
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, the
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students
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commute to
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, the
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transportations
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are used, which may do wonders for the environment as it could make the air purer and help people get rid of traffic jam.
However
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, online learning has some adverse impacts on
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students
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health. It could be explained by the fact that looking at the computer’s screen for a long period of time may do harm
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their eyes and body as well. They are likely to suffer from obesity as well due to sitting at the table without doing any physical exercise after that.
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,
students
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do not stand a chance to talk with their friends
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to
face
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so that
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it
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may
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lead to isolation, depression or other mental ailments.
On the other hand
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, learning at
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is a more effective method for
children
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.
To begin
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with, studying at
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could assure
students
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’ discipline and
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their attention to the lectures. Yet studying at home without supervision, some
students
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have a tendency to be neglected and start surfing social
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. Going to
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,
moreover
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, helps
students
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boost their soft skills
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as communication, presentation, public speaking and teamwork. Those skills are noticeably vital for
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to have a well-paid job in the future.
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but not least,
children
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could meet their friends and teachers
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to
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so that
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it
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could strengthen the bond among them and
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help
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to release their stress when sharing with their peers. In conclusion, though online learning is
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convenient
convinient
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convenient
, it could undermine
students
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’ both physical and mental health.
Therefore
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, going to
school
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to gain
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knowledge
knowlegde
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knowledge
is a more practical method.
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