Educaiton for young poeple is important in many countries.However, some people think that the government should spend more money on education in adult populations who cannot read and write. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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giving
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goverment
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physically disabled . I completely agree with
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right to take and give proper
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enlightenment
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strict rule to give learning to every citizen of that nation .
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and they do not
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concentrate
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concentrate
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treatment of anything .
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to study but they
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provide free education to
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children who can not able to pay
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of
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a school for those who
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a disability
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anything like writing and reading .
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poor children for their bright future . To cite an
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, Ratan Tata citizen of India donates 70% of his salary to
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welfare who
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education
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education
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the matter mentioned above . I espouse the notion and completely agree to spend
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education
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of people who cannot write or read and
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for their great future and help them to overcome the situation .
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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