Nowadays robots do more and more jobs instead of humans. Does this development have a more advantages than disadvantages?

More
robots
are “employed” to do certain jobs than humans nowadays. In
this
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with
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both pros and cons and will state my opinion in the conclusion.
First
and foremost
robots
are able to
work
faster and cost way
less
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expenses than human workers.
This
is because businesses and companies do not have to pay them a monthly salary as they would normally have to do.
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there are no costs needed for health
insurances
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.
In other
words
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robots
do not need to go on sick leave and require
such
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. A recent study conducted by the Harvard
school
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of science showed that
robots
can
work
up to 20 times faster than a regular human employee.
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those machines are very beneficial in our today’s society. Regarding the
disadvantages
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robots
take away occupations from men and women.
Therefore
there may be a higher amount of unemployed in the future than it has ever been before.
Hence
the government had to pay high rates of unemployment fees.
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words
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individuals are not able to
work
their regular jobs anymore because of their faster and less expensive technological competition.
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people will suffer from not pursuing a job which gives them a certain sense in their life as well as not receiving a monthly salary. These issues may lead to
a
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higher depression and suicide rate in our society. In
conclusion
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I opine, that the disadvantages outweigh the advantages because even though
robots
might be faster than humans
it
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will lead to more problems and
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harm to us humans which cannot be the case in any way. People have a right to
work
which should not be given up to metallic beings.
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