Nowadays robots do more and more jobs instead of humans. Does this development have a more advantages than disadvantages?

#robots #jobs #humans #development

robots

are “employed” to do certain jobs than humans nowadays. In

this

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both pros and cons and will state my opinion in the conclusion.

First

and foremost

robots

are able to

work

faster and cost way

less

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expenses than human workers.

This

is because businesses and companies do not have to pay them a monthly salary as they would normally have to do.

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there are no costs needed for health

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robots

do not need to go on sick leave and require

such

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. A recent study conducted by the Harvard

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of science showed that

robots

can

work

up to 20 times faster than a regular human employee.

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those machines are very beneficial in our today’s society. Regarding the

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robots

take away occupations from men and women.

Therefore

there may be a higher amount of unemployed in the future than it has ever been before.

Hence

the government had to pay high rates of unemployment fees.

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individuals are not able to

work

their regular jobs anymore because of their faster and less expensive technological competition.

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people will suffer from not pursuing a job which gives them a certain sense in their life as well as not receiving a monthly salary. These issues may lead to

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higher depression and suicide rate in our society. In

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I opine, that the disadvantages outweigh the advantages because even though

robots

might be faster than humans

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will lead to more problems and

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harm to us humans which cannot be the case in any way. People have a right to

work

which should not be given up to metallic beings.

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