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International travel is becoming cheaper, and countries are opening their doors to more and more tourists. Do the advantages of increased tourism outweigh its disadvantages?

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Travelling around the world is becoming less expensive,
thus
 many
countries
 open their gates to more and more
people
.
This
 trend has increased international
tourism
 over the years and I believe that the advantages of it outlast the disadvantages. Recently, International travel costs dropped down, and many
people
 can afford a flight ticket to reach not only border
countries
 but
also
 far-away destinations.
This
 is due to the unprecedented pandemic humankind has experienced, where the world completely stopped. After that long lockdown,
people
 craved travelling and going places all over the globe.
As a result
 many low costs company,
such
 as Ryanair and Easyjet, showed out and offered unthinkable flight prices that have encouraged, especially young
people
, to travel again.
This
 action made by flight companies had a huge impact on reviving the
tourism
 industry which basically died during the period of Covid 19. Another upside of international
tourism
 relates to the low costs of most accommodations in different
countries
.
This
 is
also
 encouraging for international travel because there are many platforms like Airbnb, Booking, and Expedia, that stimulate
people
 to go places without spending so much money. With these changes,
countries
 are experiencing a huge number of tourists throughout the year, especially during summer.
For example
, Italy had a plus 200% in bookings in the summer of 2022, 2 years after Covid's beginning. In conclusion, it can be said that , especially after the unprecedented time we have lived in, international
tourism
 has more positive features than negative ones. It is helping
countries
 to pass through the unique crisis they had to survive, and that they hope to not face anymore.
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