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The internet has a bigger impact on people’s lives because it is more popular than television.

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Nowadays,
people
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use
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 the
Internet
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 a lot more than television and the
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 has an effect on them. I agree with the opinion that Social networks and news on the
Internet
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 which becoming more popular has an effect on our generation because of its opportunities and popularity. It is possible to do some actions easier with the help of the
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.
Internet
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 makes it possible to do a lot of things fast and far.
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,
people
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 can shop, pay some money and connect with each other at home.
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 now there is no difficulty
to watch
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 videos and
read
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 new news on the
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. So, using the
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 makes our lives easier and it becoming more popular than television.
Due to
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 the popularity of the
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people
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 and the young generation are becoming more dependent on Social networks.
People
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 play, do homework, watch videos and even learn to do something with the help of the
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 and it is impossible to imagine our lives without it.
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, the interview that was taken with teenagers in Kazakhstan has shown information about how long these young
people
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use
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 the
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 connection.
According to
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 the interview, 70% of teenagers
use
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 the
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 about 6-10 hours a day, and the other 30% of them
use
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 social networks about 4 hours a day
due to
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 the lessons.It means that nowadays the
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 is becoming a part of our lives, and it will have an effect on us.
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, the
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 connection is more popular now because of its opportunities and it is affecting our generation. sometimes later it would not be possible to live without the
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.

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