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Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every yong person how to be a good parent Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent

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The diagram shows the estimated process of urbanization in each continent compared to the global average over 27
years
. The
rate
 of people living in a
city
 can be changed not in the same way in different parts of the world. The most significant
rate
 of changes in urbanization is supposed to be in Africa. In 2003 about
a
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two-fifth fifth of Africans lived in the
city
, but according to experts for 27
years
this
 figure will grow,
in
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 2030 over one-half of the African population will live in urban areas. We
also
 can see a growth forecast in Asia, 7% more Asians in 2030 compared to 2003 will live in the
city
. In other ,continents
this
rate
 in the future will be higher, than 19
years
 ago too.
For instance
, in 2003 in ,Europe about three fourth of the population lived in urban areas,and 8
years
 later about four-fifths of the Europeans will live in the
city
. In 2030 South America is supposed to be the most urbanized continent in the world, over four-fifths of the Latins will live in the
city
. The
rate
 in North America in 2030 is similar to the
rate
 in 2003, about 80% of the population will live in urban areas. Overall, it should be mentioned, that the most significant progress in urbanization can see is in Asia and in Africa, but their
rate
 is still less than the global average.
Also
, South America is on the way to be the most urbanized in the world
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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