Some people think that keeping pets is good for children while others think it is dangerous and unhealthy for them? Which viewpoint do you agree with?

Certain
people
believe that raising
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pet
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in a house supports
kids
to grow in an ethical manner
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because
children
are expose
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to domestic
animals
and able to learn responsibility, love and care
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for other
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for other
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. Whereas, others assume raising
pets
cause safety issues
such
as diseases and physical threats for
children
,
therefore
, domestic
animals
are not safe for
kids
. In my
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I believe keeping
pets
will beneficial to
children
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their
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young age.
On the other hand
,
minor
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proportion of
people
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keeping
pets
harmful
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is harmful
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for
kids
, because some
animals
can be aggressive in various situations,
for example
sometimes dogs and cats can behave violently with
kids
and even there are chances
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physical harm when playing with
kids
.
Likewise
, some individual believes
pets
can spread diseases,
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cats, rabbits and birds can cause asthma not only for
children
but
also
for adults.
On the other hand
,
majority
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of
people
think keeping
pets
helps
children
to take
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,
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when
kids
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pets
, they are able to look after them in
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way teaches them to make
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decision
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.
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mental
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health and decision-making skills of
kids
.
Similarly
, emotional connection with their companion will enhance love and caring nature for other living beings.
For instance
,
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who
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pets
have
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more empathy
over
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others than
kids
without
pets
.
Moreover
,
children
can get
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with
pets
to spend some quality
times
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themselves physically and mentally. In conclusion,
children
who
owns
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domestic
animals
,
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learns
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good habits by caring
their
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companion.
Also
, most
people
assume keeping
pets
not
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a threat to
children
but beneficial for their wellbeing. Letting
children
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interact with
pets
allows
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to learn
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responsibility, love and care, as well as support to improve good ethical practices
in
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their
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young age.
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